Non-existent" Let me remain in my state of non-existence Where my shadow is transparent and my emotions hallow My physical being ... " |
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| Let me remain in my state of non-existence Where my shadow is transparent and my emotions hallow My physical being a simple decoy pass right through me like a blade through flesh My thoughts are whistles against the wind Morals are myths Reality is non-existent | |
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| 04-22-2009, 03:27 PM | away - #2 |
| this is deep. seriously. I know that comment seems cliche, but I like where this poem went. I would have liked it to be a little longer, explore the subject more (only because I liked the viewpoint and tone), but this is good. "My thoughts are whistles against the wind" - that line is tight. nice work. | |
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