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12/14/08" Time can heal the heart but the scar remains broken flesh with numing pain I tried not to be bitter ... " |
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| Time can heal the heart but the scar remains broken flesh with numing pain I tried not to be bitter but anger got the best of me I tried to believe again but I have nothing left in me you didn't just break my heart you took away my what ifs made me hate to think of giving another man what I threw away in you I'm wise now and realize that no love can ever be real just acid on the heart with memories time can't kill | |
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| 01-01-2009, 08:01 PM | away - #2 |
| a whole lot said in a few short lines. this one runs deep and it really portrays the hurt very well. | |
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| 01-08-2009, 04:28 PM | away - #3 |
 thank you for the comment i really appreciate it.....and its been a while...lol...well any way thanx again | |
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| 01-20-2009, 02:11 PM | away - #4 |
| love the ending. vivid words. you are getting better at describing, showing instead of telling. I really have liked the poems you have posted in 2008, look forward to more heat this yr. | |
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| 01-20-2009, 02:19 PM | away - #5 |
| I really loved that acid on the heart bit, had a strong ending. It felt like a random bolt of emotion jotted down, almost like a "freestyle" but it had a strong coherent flow, wasn't overdone or under-whelming.. as the three little bears story goes.. it was "just right" Thank you for the read. | |
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| 03-04-2009, 12:48 AM | away - #6 |
| Amen! Short Simple Sweet and To the Point! | |
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