Children of a Lesser God

[Def Poet]

http://slumz.boxden.com/showthread.php?p=6465262#post6465262

Look past the tone of my skin
The texture of my hair &
My rugged exterior
Tell me that you see me
Not the stereotype that’s been placed
On the men of my ethnicity
Attempt to look past what your eyes can see
Learn the inner me &
Don’t just label and shelve me
The recent surge of hate towards race disgusts me

Even my own race looks down on me in disgrace
How can I elevate
When the entire world is thine enemy &
My own people oppress me
Under their breath they talk low & mumble
Poppin sh*t like house nigga this and sell-out that
Just because I shattered the so called mold we’ve conformed too

I was bred in the hood
Yet the image of a thug is not what I portray
My demeanor is that of an intellectual male
With many goals to achieve
But you still flinch & clench your purse or wallet tight
When I pass your way on the street

(Just stop for a second &
Ask yourself “Why is it that you judge me?”
There is no answer to validate this bigotry)

But don’t ever get it twisted
Cause the sh*t I experience
Isn’t just secluded to one race
We all must endure the wrath of racism
Whether it be dirty looks that could sear flesh or
Serrated words that slice away chunks of your soul
Like NGH, spic, or crack-er
Why can’t we just look at a person &
See a human being instead of the tone of their skin

As I jot down these words
I pray that one day we’ll be blessed
With equality between ethnicities &
This vain society we dwell in now
Will be something only time remembers
Until then I’ll continue to be
The child of a so called lesser God
Because one day this integration of my thoughts will be read & acknowledged
My only prayer is that they will innovate & cultivate
The minds of the ignorant & bestow upon them
A sense of something greater
Than this racial sh*t we as people place so much emphasis on ©

[aplus]

COT-DAYUM. That is what poetry is all about. This is a tight poem from top to bottom, def poet. The message is undeniable, the intensity comes off like a pac rap, yet the word choices sound like an English major's thesis. This poem embodies the imbalance of bigoted thinking and its effect in our world. Nicely done, man...nicely done...

[Def Poet]

thanks fam, i appreciate the crit

[preshrunkmilk]

wow i think my heart just cryed a bit....aplus said it all power in the words and a word usage that takes me back to my college days then it switches right back to a hood feel, then back agien.....well done

[dondada22]

That poem was deep man..I loved it. I remember watching the movie was it was nice how you wrote about ethnicity.

Can't wait to read more

[Don Savant]

it's the return of the....

KINGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG

yes sir..i have no speech prepared, therefore i shall agree with what's already been said...

you've been building up to this piece for a while...glad to see how well it came together...

we gone make it...first Aplus...then you got next....

[*LEGEND*]

mann i remember u showed this to me a while back and i was blown away

its nice to see u off that writers blockk

or wait...nevermind cuz this poem is abit old...lol

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

first off i am SO sorry it took me so long to come read this - some unforseen drama etc.

having said that...this is probably one of the hottest poems i've read in quite awhile...i'll tell you the thing that struck me the most is how you said you were bred in the hood but a thug is not what you portray...i like how you are speaking from the standpoint of an educated man, but still use a little profanity to get your point across - that was VERY well done...the message is one of complete truth...it flowed well, it wasn't cliche...i give it a 10/10 hands down...good sh*t def :applause:

[Def Poet]

thank you all for taking the time to critique my poem and your generous comments.

[aplus]

second read = still hot

I like this one a lot, from title to conclusion

[True Geniu$]

damn def. this is hot on the real. the message can't be said anymore clearer. very nicely written in terms of word choice and flow. very nice piece mr. def poet...

[Def Poet]

thanks again to everyone for taking the time to critique my work.

[Gentle Anger]

Yo, this right here, this is poetry. Nothing more to be said.

[catalytic1]

Poem went to different ends of the spectrum, pride and frustration expressed, transcendence, taking racism off its long term platform. Real writing.

[LordMason DaRula]

wow i think my heart just cryed a bit....aplus said it all power in the words and a word usage that takes me back to my college days then it switches right back to a hood feel, then back agien.....well done

rofl :lol:


my heart cryed a lil bit ..that gotta be the best cosign ever on BX

:lol:

[Def Poet]

lol mason...how you not gone crit the thread....i'm still around lurking, just haven't been up to posting my new stuff

[LordMason DaRula]

lol mason...how you not gone crit the thread....i'm still around lurking, just haven't been up to posting my new stuff

:lol: actually I was agreeing with the cosign.....

it felt good to read some new stuff from you man.. its been a while....a longgggggggg while.....


this is most def a-1 work

[Def Poet]

lol i posted this in 06

[LordMason DaRula]

u did?

I was i here?
:lol:

[Def Poet]

yeah you should have been, it was posted 04-14-2006, 09:16 AM

[inequívoco alto]

Pure talent...