"Poetry"

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Mental masterpieces composed under the somber light hanging from the cracked ceiling,
Crumpled looseleaf is scattered around the trashcan tainted with unclear thoughts and incomplete feelings,
The ink dances across the lines, while the hand ravages with thoughts,
Fighting the urge to quit, overwhelmed with anxiety, although completely distraught,
Unique, yet solemn unspoken words slip beneath the minds intelligence,
Reaching far and beyond as I step outside of myself, and examine life thru my sixth sense,
Sitting in solitude, trying to conjour up syllables to lead the mind astray,
While my palm balls up misguided words, still my mind seeks to finds another way,
Curious visions that haven't yet been captured by this art and cry for explanation,
Faint descriptions die slow due to the lack of explicit exploitation,
Vocabulary with no force to push its meaning linger in anticipation in the back of my mind,
Merely for recognition, and the hopes of due acclaim it will find,
But validation is not the reason I write poems, I write for the relief of enslaved emotion,
Therefore, I write with a passion, fueled by love and give this poetry all my devotion...
Tortured by lies, yet still illuminating truth, secluding myself from the world , while in return it ignores my absence,
But the rooms that binds me and the paper that nourishes me acknowledges my presence,
Nonetheless, thru all the agony, pain, hatred, discouragement, and frustration, I still confront my desk with the same dedication,
Once again as I return to the warm seat that settles me, for another quiet moment of poetic meditation....

[Don Savant]

*falls out*

[Def Poet]

You developed this into a hot little piece. it's hard to believe you came up twith this while we were talking but you did. hto ass ending.

[Don Savant]

*looks around...scratches head* i'm out the game dogg...that was nice...

[Darkside]

man thats some hot sh*t cuz keep it up

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thanks fam...cmon ayo, wulf, streets, aplus, wrek, beatbox, ....crits....if you read it drop your thoughts

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

Woooooooooooooo that was FIYAHHHH!!! So um...what u doin lata?? heheheh j/k but forreal Im feelin REALLY REALLY inadequate right about now cuz I dont think I've EVER read sh*t as good as that...mad props for that Daddy...1 hunnit

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AAAAYYYYYYOOOOOOOOOO.....can you PM me you AOL IM name I want to holla some poetry....i mean about some poetry....but really could you hit me up???

[*LEGEND*]

hey didnt i tell u to save this one for me???? U were gonna ghostwrite for me right? Strait crack on thsi one fam....nice

[cyberwulf]

Nonetheless, thru all the agony, pain, hatred, discouragement, and frustration, I still confront my desk with the same dedication,
Once again as I return to the warm seat that settles me, for another quiet moment of poetic meditation....

^feelin that...

Well blue the best of your work and the worst of your work comes out in here...the imagery captured my mind, but it felt like thats where it stopped the content of it wasn't anything i haven't read before, nothing new...flow was a nice subtle kinda flow didn't mess with it much...your line structure was clopped a little, not much tho

yes im nit pickin now but since no one else has anything helpful to say im just tryin to help out, always room to improve

i'll give this one a 8/10 i've seen deeper from you it just didn't hold me for to long

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tru good looks on the crit....i hope there is no spite in it.....just becuz im that way...ya know....but thanks alot for the helpful analysis...stay up

[cyberwulf]

all love cuzin just thought i'd pick at the little things

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tru thanks alot though fam...i love crits...esp. insightful ones.....stay up

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uppin for more f/b

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UPPin...

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uppin again!

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Cmon More F/b!!!

[LyrikallyAklaim]

yo fam, that poem was thought provoking and well put......i was actually being drawn into the poem as i was readin it.......VERY VERY VERY INSIGHTFUL *****.....keep penning your thought and much luv *****

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more f/b....aplus where u at...

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uppin...

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uppin....

[aplus]

damn, I must've missed this one, too - you have been putting in some time in the lab, blue, you got like a kilo of dope poems in here and sh*t...

this one is mad hot, I can't really criticize it...you do a good job of not getting in a rut - you try different sh*t all the time...props...

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savant i want this one in the book

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you got that!!!

[Don Savant]

10-4 good buddy

[lyriq2003]

i can bow before u gracefully for this one kid good stuff... very well tranfered from mind to physical depiction was absoulute

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uppin for nep peeps to crit

[juckwin]

i didnt deserve to read that...

[DaMassacre]

yea thats dope...great pictures...

[deltamae]

This one is like the one u did called Ransom... except better.

[Miss_Minnie]

that was deep
i read others and they seem to have a different perspective of poetry

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bumpin.....

[Ju$tin15]

dang dog. thats all i can say is dang. nope. its not, i got 1 more word, no i dont. my bad. just lost it.

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Reviving A Classic For Crits

[shadow_monkey]

that was really good nice work been writing for a short while now wish i had talent like that

[True Geniu$]

real emotion in this one. classic. wow...

[True Geniu$]

dang dog. thats all i can say is dang. nope. its not, i got 1 more word, no i dont. my bad. just lost it.

^wat the fu*k was i talking about?

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Ha.....

[WhiteBoy773]

Damn man, This haz 2 be one of the hottest dropz i've seen on the poetry section. Keep dat sh*t up. 1.

[niece]

that was hott

it was so meaningful

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uppin...

[niece]

man dat was hott
i love the flow
and that last line
had me in aww

madd propz g

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uppin

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a classic