Brainstorming

[Don Savant]

My Pen


I've retired my pen
Again and again
And again I succumb
For it must be the love of
That object that rests
Between my index, my middle
And my thumb
Oh how I long to be
Great at this but
The weight of this
Gets so heavy
I go numb
And as I regain all confidence
And rise to the top again
I feel like I'm the one again
And then I'm stumped
Writer's block takes control of me
Won't give up it's hold on me
I have thoughts that won't flow from me
And I can't go on
And then
My block is defeated
And and
My pen
It gets heated
And
I'm back on my feet again
And
My words are recieved again
And I feel I can't stop
Oh and then I let go again
I'm back to mellow again
My passion's love mode again
And then I reload again
And relenquish my soul again
As I clutch my pen

[Def Poet]

hotness fam. i think everyone can relate to that poem.

[~BLUEPRINT~]

good drop...thats exactly what mode im in right now....

[Don Savant]

thanks y'all..more crits please?

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

im LOVIN this...i am battling writer's block as we speak and i was tryin to write about not being able to write...this is a great subject and u put it down well...

[Don Savant]

Thanks Ayo..i Appreciate That..

[Don Savant]

more feedback please

[aplus]

yeah, usually poems about writer's block can come off kinda corny...but you avoided that by not falling into cliches and sh*t like that...I like this one...1

[*LEGEND*]

what up savant...great drop fam. u put it down nice. I guess we all get to trhat point but we need to bounce back. Which reminds me, i need to post up a poem...

[Carlos_Casas]

Dats some fia sh*t, homey_Keep it up wit whateva ya do my *****

[Don Savant]

thanks y'all..carlos...good lookin...preciate the crits....

[Don Savant]

more more more

[Don Savant]

uppin

[Don Savant]

yup..this one too

[Don Savant]

up................

[ironknots]

it's ok

[LordMason DaRula]

Man u the truth for this one, real creative, and don't let the game go, it needs ya, keep doing what ya doin ~1

[ironknots]

I am scared to comment.....
i maybe warned again
you have my props on this 1.....

[Don Savant]

uppin to see if some of the new folks will crit

[lburna34]

Very well written my brotha