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09-12-2005, 08:44 AM
http://slumz.boxden.com/showthread.php?t=422411
I'm working on a project, a fiction chapbook or a novella, where I mix in several short stories about relationships (good and bad) with short comments about love and dating, etc.
This drop isn't really a story, but it is not poetry either...let's call it prose. F--k labels anyway if it is good writing, right? But I'll let you be the judge if it is good or not. Feedback appreciated...
Love Commentary #1
You know, it’s absolutely true what they say about that old whore, Love. Sometimes she needs to be insulted or scorned or even pushed around a little bit. Because once you show her too much compassion, once you start reciting all those silly clichés and cutesy pet names that she wants to hear, she’ll begin thinking that you’re soft. If you show too much kindness, she’ll inevitably mistake that for blindness, and next thing you know she’ll be creeping off with your best friend to the men’s room for a quickie, or giving the hired help an extra tip in your bedroom while you’re working overtime. If you seem like a pushover, she will sure as sh*t humiliate you, and probably in full view of your peers, co-workers, and relatives. You just can’t expect Love to simply reciprocate your newly-minted feelings of passion without causing you pain; that’s like trying to find a dog that doesn’t piss on hydrants.
She will make a habit of proudly lifting you up on a pedestal for everyone to see and then slyly shoving you off, cracking jokes while the whole world snickers at your misery. Love is a bi*ch like that. That’s why it’s always better to tease her than to please her, to never give in, to always let her seek you out and not vice versa. Because all the joy remains in the hunt for Love; once she’s captured you, if you are lucky, she’ll eventually set you free, confused and disoriented, without any reason or logic behind your release. If you’re unlucky, she’ll torment you from the inside until you’ve died a thousand deaths, and yet you will still long for her torturous embrace.
I'm working on a project, a fiction chapbook or a novella, where I mix in several short stories about relationships (good and bad) with short comments about love and dating, etc.
This drop isn't really a story, but it is not poetry either...let's call it prose. F--k labels anyway if it is good writing, right? But I'll let you be the judge if it is good or not. Feedback appreciated...
Love Commentary #1
You know, it’s absolutely true what they say about that old whore, Love. Sometimes she needs to be insulted or scorned or even pushed around a little bit. Because once you show her too much compassion, once you start reciting all those silly clichés and cutesy pet names that she wants to hear, she’ll begin thinking that you’re soft. If you show too much kindness, she’ll inevitably mistake that for blindness, and next thing you know she’ll be creeping off with your best friend to the men’s room for a quickie, or giving the hired help an extra tip in your bedroom while you’re working overtime. If you seem like a pushover, she will sure as sh*t humiliate you, and probably in full view of your peers, co-workers, and relatives. You just can’t expect Love to simply reciprocate your newly-minted feelings of passion without causing you pain; that’s like trying to find a dog that doesn’t piss on hydrants.
She will make a habit of proudly lifting you up on a pedestal for everyone to see and then slyly shoving you off, cracking jokes while the whole world snickers at your misery. Love is a bi*ch like that. That’s why it’s always better to tease her than to please her, to never give in, to always let her seek you out and not vice versa. Because all the joy remains in the hunt for Love; once she’s captured you, if you are lucky, she’ll eventually set you free, confused and disoriented, without any reason or logic behind your release. If you’re unlucky, she’ll torment you from the inside until you’ve died a thousand deaths, and yet you will still long for her torturous embrace.