23 Years…

[Malicious Logic]

I wrote this poem when I was thinking back on my life. Feel free to give your crits on this.

23 Years…
Since I have been put into existence
23 Years…
My soul continues to fight this sadistic resistance
23 Years…
People continue to overlook my potential
23 Years…
Doubted countless times beyond my credentials
23 Years…
I kept shade to myself to avoid complications
23 Years…
Almost fell into the grasp of temptations
23 Years…
I watched the world turn from young to old
23 Years…
I managed to remain with a heart maintaining the purity of gold
23 Years…
Time begins to fold into a new chapter
23 Years…
Love hopefully turns a page thereafter
23 Years…
Time nears to meet the moment of truth
23 Years…
Aiming high to reach foreverlasting youth...

[~OSiRiS~]

All dats a great way to sum up your experiences, cuzzo!!!~ People like me & you elevate on a constant basis

[WhiteBoy773]

I waz feelin' da poem, but the 23 three yearz waz loosein' its meanin' by the end of the poem, u should say 23 yearz after every few sentences and not after every1. Nice drop though.

[~BLUEPRINT~]

take out the every 23 years all together and make it your ending and you got an exceptional piece here broham

[Malicious Logic]

Thanks everyone for the input :)

[Obloquy]

This should be preformed.

I don't really like it, but it reads as if it should be delivered vocally rather than through a page.

[DaDimeBalla22]

I liked that poem it was different, seems like something I would've done, too bad you beat me to it lol. I liked how you related everything to your age though. keep it up...

[Malicious Logic]

Thanks everyone! Keep the crits coming this is helping me get better :)

:applause: :applause:

[dubc]

I liked it homie simple but it works