Depth Of My Sorrow

[NovaBlaze]

Visions from my past haunt me as I think about
The misery that plagues my life and ravages me throughout
The pain is deep, the wounds don’t heal
Like a chasm in my stomach, the feelings surreal
As I breathe in, breathe out
The point of my life I sorely doubt
I sit, I lay, I think, I wonder
The turmoil I deal with tosses all asunder
I try to recover, I try to hold on
Try to keep from going under as the bell tolls on
It’s like a nightmare never-ending
Can’t stop falling, can’t cease descending
At speeds undreamed by most
I fall unwilling to meet my host
For I know I’m met at the end of desire
All evil to repent in eternal fire

[aplus]

this is OK, I like the morbid nature of it...

the mods are going to tell you that you should crit other people's work and add a link to one of your crits to this drop....fair warning.

[Don Savant]

yeah, what he said....welcome to the board and we appreciate ya post but ya goota read and follow the rules or we have to delete your post cool?

[NovaBlaze]

could you please explain that or point me to the rules. I'm new to this whole internet post thing so I don't understand what your talking about. If you explain please do it in plain english. Thanx

[Ju$tin15]

the poem was good...

[NovaBlaze]

Thanx to anybody who posts or posted feedback. Bigups. Give props if you feelin this. I'll do the same

[NovaBlaze]

http://slumz.boxden.com/showthread.php?p=2143135&posted=1#post2143135

My crit. Cool?

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

yessir...and this was kinda hot...some of the rhymes seemed forced but i like the concept it was aiight to me...

[SweeTMizEry]

I was feelin the poem, props 2 u : )