Nothing

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Nothing

It felt like the world gave me nothing,
except secondhand smoke in my atmosphere,
permission to play catch with the neighbor’s kid
(the one who had the personality of a pet rock),
corduroys that didn’t fit my awkward physique,
and classmates who teased me. Nothing.

I was assigned chores without an allowance,
given water when I begged for grape soda,
told to save money while friends flaunted new toys,
and ordered to be polite, even when people gave me nothing.
Later, as a teenager, my parents watched as circumstances
kicked confusion into their baby boy’s blood.
Yet they gave me nothing, except occasional advice.

And now I’m older, spending Saturday night sober,
trying to resist the pull of my vices,
relaxing after five days of working a job I despise
just so I can purchase more sh*t that I don’t need,
and I realize when the world gave me nothing,
I had everything.

[~BLUEPRINT~]

WOW! this was pure fiyah....10/10

[Iceman46ct]

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(the one who had the personality of a pet rock),


Love that line right there. I like the twist this piece had at the end. Def a good write

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

im loving how you twisted nothingness into everythingness...your thought process is a unique one, thats a blessing...hot

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thanks for the feedback ya'll...any more crits?

[Def Poet]

i read this 3 times and it was hot each time, just had to fully grasp the concept

[Ju$tin15]

this is real hot man. i feel ya concept. its hot. i really liked it. it hit a spot in my soul.

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uppin...

[TheOneTheOnly]

damn kept on readin thinkin what can i say...truly at a lost for words thats some hot stuff rt thurr fa real