If I Dream

[RightSideDark]

http://slumz.boxden.com/showthread.php?t=140381




If I Dream

If I dare to dream of pain
All by myself in the rain
Take me in and dry my face
Wipe my scarlet tears of hate
If I dare to dream of light
While caressing the darkest night
Will you guide me back before
I step both feet thru the last door
If I dare to dream of love
And fly with both the crows and doves
Will my feathers turn back to ash
Consumed by flames that cannot last
If I dare to dream I fall
While the world still looks this small
Will you remind my Soul at least
The sun will always rise in the east
If I dare to dream of days
The sky is filled with foggy haze
Will you replace the times I knew
With a sky that still looks blue
If I dare to dream I see
The Destiny I tried hard to leave
Touch my hand and guide my eyes
So I can feel the sun finally rise
If I dare to dream I hear
Your footsteps drawing near
Do not wake me from my bliss
Just say goodnight with your kiss.

[phatboi1984]

i kinda liked that ...propz anyway

[~BLUEPRINT~]

you should change the title too "Can You Say Clich'e" because thats exactly what this piece was.....not feeling it....3/10

[brodch01]

i feel what blu is saying... but some of what you have here is too good to pass over that quickly... "If I dare to dream of love/ And fly with both the crows and doves /Will my feathers turn back to ash" that sh*t is tough, and id like to see that idea expanded on... also, i like the movement between the subject's tactile and the object's ulterior sense guidance... yea, i liked this...

[RightSideDark]

thanks for the feedback everyone.

[diamond diva]

good and bad points overall i give u a 6/10