[juelz santana] Im BAAAAAACK [juelz santana] My first sh*t in a looong time....

[*LEGEND*]

http://slumz.boxden.com/showthread.php?t=137030



this one is called My first love...feel it

'as i sit back and wonder' how life without u would b.
I often think life without u....is pure cruelty.
I couldnt go one day without hearing ur voice,
listening 2 every word attentively, loving u is not a choice.
Its a fact instilled in me, since the day i seen u.
Inside the store, so beautiful, wanted to hold and be with u.
So precious as u spoke, ur words touched me deep,
u were the 1 thing i knew, i always wanted to keep.
Wanted to always be near u, dreamed of u in my sleep,
sometimes found u to be rather expensive, other times u were cheap.
I will never forget the 1st words u said...u threw my loop 4 a whirl,
'imagine that' how it would be if u were to rule the world
I cant EVER give u up, cuz life without u is useless
id 'lose it,' would live confused if...there was life without muzik

*LEGEND*

shoulda saved this sh*t for open mic

shouts to playboy, blue, don, ayo...im back from a long ass hiatus
Seen the section is growing...much love to yall

oh yeah i penned this in 6 min....

[phatboi1984]

one word ...hot

[~BLUEPRINT~]

way to come back....you are a lil rusty but nothing a lil consistency cant shake.....but not bad for your come back piece.....6.5/10

[LordMason DaRula]

welcome back homie, think u r right......this is good for open mic win........ um new rules here posted by don u gotta link a critique to ya new post............. other than that.... wow i liked it

[Def Poet]

yeah i liked the drop fam, keep posting

[Don Savant]

ayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyoooooooooooo ooooooooooooooo the legend has returned.....bout time nukka....


i got ya link for ya man..we had to go back to the old days....holla at ya folk....get ya open mic vote in too if you haven't already...

[<the takeova>]

Good sh*t

[diamond diva]

legend its nice to see u back, u know we have some unfinished buisness so holla at ya girl

[*LEGEND*]

yo just uppin for the peeps that didnt see it...

and dabottomgirl holla at me...

[brodch01]

sounds forced in places... knock that rust off...

[*LEGEND*]

uppin since it seems like blueprint and playboy took a spin off my sh*t...lol

its all love tho...lol

[dazdillinger187]

propssafds

[dazdillinger187]

this is crazy it deserves two more props

[dazdillinger187]

props and

[dazdillinger187]

you deep aman

[dazdillinger187]

craay

[TheOneTheOnly]

hot stuff just seems like ive heard this somewhere b4 though *thinking*

[*LEGEND*]

this is crazy it deserves two more props
damn son, i dunno how to take that.

lol. U posted more than i have on this thread. LOL

thanx for the feedback yall

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

i was feelin this...hot sh*t & welcome back dunny we missed u

[*LEGEND*]

uppin an old joint? haha

[philalove]

does sound a little forced in places but good overall. i like a good love poem for music, props.