Poem to my unborn child

[mac-swift]

this poem is to my unborn child,
the love I have for you is not mild,
it’s hotter than the sun,
you will experience pain also lots of fun,
cuz im gonna make ur life the best,
also unique and not like the rest,
I might be hard on u at times,
cuz I want ur life 2 be better than mines,
and you to be in the front of the lines,
Not in back like I was 4 a while,
I can't wait 2 see ur beautiful smile,
cuz that will make me past complete,
Someday we will see each other and meet,
I love u and I never saw u,
In ur roughest times ill help u through,
so until I see ur beautiful face,
ur in my heart in the specialist place!!!!!!!!!!

[LordMason DaRula]

i got the feelin heard this b4, or maybe it just there are alot of poems with this title, anyways welcome to tha section and for for my critique....................str8

[SuNsHiNe_BLuE]

this is a nice concept...but the structure & wording is very young (i dont know how old you are)...play with the words this could be so so much deeper...3/10

[Don Savant]

this had the potential to be very deep....concept was on point..but like ayo said..vocab could have been better....like she said..how old are you? that wasy at least I know what age group to base my future crits of your work on....