apathy

[iLL NiCCa]

i wanna say so much
like dam wonder how he did it
took so much from the space
of a 7 7/8 fitted
but life feels apathetic
am i pathetic
if ma feelings are
methaphorically an anesthetic
meaning im numbed down
summed up im run down
niggas aint lyin - lifes a bi*ch
lookin screwd face at this pyschiatrist
like are you ok
did pops used to slap u
na im iight
like here take this capsule
itll clear you up
get u bak on trak
im like save the speech
hold dat prozac
is nothin against u
jus ur counselin is limited
cuz man i realized
da life we livin in

[CandyBlueRider]

the anaesthetic part was pretty nice, thought it kinda weakened towards the end but overall i liked it

[aplus]

it started out kinda strong, but then faded. I liked it, but the ending could need tightening. It was like you had a lot of energy with this poem when you first started, and then kinda trailed off...pretty decent drop.