Livin In tha Ghetto

[MoneynDaBank818]

as i lay in bed going to sleep, wondering what holds tomorrow for me i just think, though i may be young, not a lie that i would spread, why am i broke, hungry, looking for some bread, havin not a family, or a loved one in my sight, hopin it will end all,and i can see the light, strolin throu these streets, lookin at my feet, dogin crooked cops, while im sellin chronic weed// maby it will end,in a better day tomarrow, sick of eatin corn dogs and havin to olways barrow// runnin out of friends no one but thiese pepole, maby in heven well be close and every thing be equal// only one way in, but 100s of ways out, hopefully we'll make it, and never have to piss shout, broke as ufck no money to buy new peddals, but wen we make it forget about the stuff that was Ghetto........
haller

[~BLUEPRINT~]

uhhhhh.....No

[MoneynDaBank818]

i aprecate the comment (hater)

[~BLUEPRINT~]

Why would i hate on something like this when i could write one line deeper than your whole life

[Don Savant]

work on structure, content and delivery

[MoneynDaBank818]

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[Don Savant]

i was just tryin to help you...if you can't take constructive cirticism then you don't need to post here..feel me?

[MoneynDaBank818]

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[Don Savant]

i-ight man...keep it civil though...we're here to help...may seem harsh at time....but take it all in the right context and it'll help you step up your game feel me? if blueprint or me or anybody else here crits you hard t's cuz we're tryin to pull better work out of you....

[MoneynDaBank818]

ic ic, thanks