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LordMason DaRula
12-06-2004, 11:54 AM
welcome back people of this section, this is something new for ya'll since I haven't posted in like months but ummmm please this it easy on the crits cause I'm kinda shaky on this new one share how u liked, and be easy everyone and take care...!



Now Is The End
by Diesel From Tha D Inc.

December 5th, 1983, the day of my birth, life was new and enjoyable,
Brand new to this existence, without a care in the world, life I was so looking foward to.
As I grew in this world, I learned what I had to, I was so smart for my age, people was like "You Just Like your Dad Boo".

Age Six, Almost Died, My Breathe Was Lost, For an illness I had since birth, I almost paid tha cost.Fast Foward In Time, my mind had gained much knowledge, Senior In High School, Then I was off to college.Struggling to buy books, keep food in my belly, Day By Day I comtemplate, "what does LIFE have planned for me?",I don't Know whats in store, but why does it seems like I'm always asking for more?.......

Now Pain is Love, and Love is Pain, Fell In LOVE so deep, I had gone insane. Now Since Pain is Love, and Love is Pain, now my body is hurtin', and all seems uncertain..........
I had come to an conclusion, Now is the End and the End is Now, December 5th, 2004, LIFE Not Worth Living No Mo!This....The Day Of My Death, My LIFE so stressed, surely I can attest.
My existence is no more, not being alive in this world, IS it HEAVEN or HELL thats in store.......???
Now IS THE END.......

Dee
12-06-2004, 12:17 PM
Damn,I feel the same way

LordMason DaRula
12-06-2004, 01:07 PM
thankx for the love....

LordMason DaRula
12-06-2004, 03:28 PM
uppin...

brodch01
12-06-2004, 05:42 PM
it reads almost like spoken word instead of pure prose or poetry... which i mean as a compliment just becaues you dont seem to play with meter too much and the piece flowed real nice when i read it outloud... nice with it...

LordMason DaRula
12-06-2004, 07:46 PM
yeah it is meant to be said aloud then just read by thanks for the critiques homes holla at me

~BLUEPRINT~
12-06-2004, 10:11 PM
look fam....I am gonna start off fresh with you and put the past behind us.....but I am a honest dude...if if anyone has to sugarcoat stuff to make it sweet... it aint real feel me? So as far as this poem I didnt like it much.....i dont think it read like spoken word at all....I dont even think it read well, but I think if you re work your structuring put a little more emotion into your word selection making the audience feel you then you got a strong piece built inside this....but if you come in here and say im hating for whatever reason, or you cant take criticism then you shouldnt post here cuz Imma always be real with as I always want people to be real with me.....so stay up fam...keep writing...you have potential to be a good poet IMO....so there is my 2 cents for what its worth....no beef....

Mizz AP
12-06-2004, 10:25 PM
u already know how I feel about this but very deep pa